Forza: Horizon

[Sungazer's Wife 6]

Forza: Horizon

The highly anticipated driving game of the year is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors for one because it is based in only the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as towns and canyons to list a couple examples. In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers researched heavily 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife such as deer standing and watching player drives by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99.

NTS: Picture Link:

http://download.gamezone.com/uploads/image/data/1106823/news-forzahorizon-2.jpg

[Badfur 13]

Forza: Horizon

The highly anticipated driving game of the year is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors for one because it is based in only the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as towns and canyons to list a couple examples.[Consider rephrasing the end of this. It's a bit wordy. Also, this is a list, if there is another place besides towns and canyons, an option would be to add a ':' after 'such as' and drop the 'to list a couple examples'] In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers researched heavily [heavily researched] 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see: leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife, such as deer standing and watching as players drives by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. [Also note, this is a long sentence, that could probably be broken up into two. Yes, appropriate use of a semi-colon, but you put it there after a long list. The sentence feels like it runs on for a bit.] Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99.

[Sungazer's Wife 6]

Forza: Horizon

The highly anticipated driving game of the year is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors for one because it is based in only the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as towns and canyons to list a couple examples. In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers researched heavily 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife such as deer standing and watching player drives by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99.

NTS: Picture Link:

http://download.game...zahorizon-2.jpg

Forza: Horizon

The highly anticipated driving game of the year is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors for one because it is based in only the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as towns and canyons to list a couple examples.[Consider rephrasing the end of this. It's a bit wordy. Also, this is a list, if there is another place besides towns and canyons, an option would be to add a ':' after 'such as' and drop the 'to list a couple examples'] In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers researched heavily [heavily researched] 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see: leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife, such as deer standing and watching as players drives by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. [Also note, this is a long sentence, that could probably be broken up into two. Yes, appropriate use of a semi-colon, but you put it there after a long list. The sentence feels like it runs on for a bit.] Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99.

The highly anticipated driving game of the year is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors because it is based soley in the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as: towns and canyons. In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers heavily researched 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see: leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife, such as deer standing and watching as players drive by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99

I went against your edit of the 'runs on for a bit' sentence, because I tried reading it as, "While driving in the game, the driver will see: leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife, such as deer standing and watching as players drive by. Depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery.", and it sounds like I'm missing something from the second sentence that the first one makes up for. Should I re-word it entirely, instead of split it up into two?

[Badfur 13]

The highly anticipated driving game of the year [,Forza: Horizon,] is nearing its release in less than a month; Forza: Horizon. Instead of Turn-10 studios developing the game, a partner studio, Playground Games, has undertaken the task of developing this game. It is unlike any of its predecessors because it is based solely in the state of Colorado. Within the game, you are able to do open world driving to anywhere in the game such as: towns and canyons. In the competitive racing of Forza: Horizon, the driver must maneuver himself or herself around traffic that can either be fast or slow while trying to beat the other people in the race.

The developers heavily researched 30 worldwide locations and settled on Colorado. They took thousands of photographs throughout the state as reference pictures for their graphic designers so the player is able to go through a life-like town, down dirt roads, to a lakeside area, through plains, foothills, forests, and canyons in a 24-hour day cycle. The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it. While driving in the game, the driver will see: leaves falling, birds flying, a geyser erupting, and general wildlife, such as deer standing and watching as players drive by; depending on what type of driver the player is, these could make the player's mind drift away from the race to the stunning scenery. Lastly, as the player is driving around, he or she will find barns; inside of these barns there are restoration project cars that the player can restore back to its glory days and drive.

The game officially releases on October 23rd, and you are able to pre-order it now. Depending on which store you pre-order it from, you will get an assortment of extras. The standard edition goes for $59.99 while the limited edition goes for $79.99

Few edits aside, is good as is for the rest of it.

[Sungazer's Wife 6]

Thanks Badfur.

[KSI twahl 7 2]

As for that sentence, it just seems unnecessary to include so much into one. Break off and say you can "Even the wildlife, such as deer that stand around and watch, plays an active role as it may distract the driver... Etc. " get how i broke it?

Other than that, good job again badfur!

[KSI twahl 7 2]

Also, using he or she so close is wasteful, as you already refer to he or she in the sentence already. "As twahl drives around in his car, twahl can proceed to watch a sunset if twahl desires..." Not the same thing obviously; but you get my drift.

[Sungazer's Wife 6]

However, what word would you use? In that sentence, we can say Twahl once, then he and his later on. In an audience, they mit be male or female. So, what's an alternative?

[KSI twahl 7 2]

The player will be able to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if he or she wishes to, and he or she can (like in the previous Forza: Motorsport) take photographs of his or her car and the scenery surrounding it.

Another unique feature in Forza will allow players to go to the foothills and watch a sunset if one wishes to do so. Also, similar to the previous Forza: Motorsport, drivers can take photographs of their cars and the scenery surrounding it; making neat and creative pictures to share with others.

Not exactly sure, maybe a rewording of the sentence is necessary. Saying "to be able to" and "if he or she wishes" is kinda like saying the same thing over again. Maybe changing that will change the use of "his/her"

As twahl is driving, he has the option to be able to stop and watch beautiful sunsets if he would like.

how about

As twahl is driving, he has the option to be able to stop and watch beautiful, glowing sunsets.

[Sungazer's Wife 6]

http://www.ksiglobal.org/blog/2012/10/09/forza-horizon/

. So, where have you been?