Badfur 13 Posted September 22, 2012 Report Share Posted September 22, 2012 Alright Anonymous (now dubbed - Anon (Everyone has 2 syllable nicknames)), same as I did in Lady's thread (explanation there), telling you what is wrong with you sample. Don't like it? Let me know. Constructive criticism, the goal is for everyone to 'be a better writer' (taking a page from Day[9]'s book) ---------------------------------------------------- Treyarch Zombies: [center your stuff, here] Starting from the original "Nazi Zombie" game Call of Duty: World at War, Zombies has hit the Call of duty franchise with a new look on multiplayer gaming. From "Nacht der Unoten", Night of the Undead, to Black Ops I map "Moon" the - slow at first - survival game type will bombard you with endless waves of zombies. Ether you're shooting the fleshy bodied undead monsters or just running around with a crawler [not everyone knows the lingo, please try and give a brief explanation for abbreviations and such] trying to gnaw at your ankles when you try to pack a punch your weapon. We all had some unforgettable moments with friends, ether running around "Five" and your teammates shooting the crazed doctor, to "Call Of the Dead" and the director[Doctor? Director? Who and what are these? Bosses? Explain. If you are giving a review of something, it is for the benefit of people that haven't played the game. They don't know the lingo or what you are talking about, which is why they are reading the review.] stalking you, and to "Moon" misfit monkeys stealing your perk machines. On the well awaited for Black Ops II there is a great addition to the Zombie game type. From one of our Favorited favorite [no caps randomly] maps on Black Ops I, Nuketown , will be one of the up coming maps that will make you fight for your life as zombies come at you from all sides. The close-quarter map is one of the newly announced addition to the "Care Package" for BlackOps II. Only the people that order the Care Package, Hardened Edition, or Digital Deluxe Edition of BlackOps II will be allowed to play this wonderful and gory map. Nuketown Zombies should not be mixed with Nuketown 2025, for if you only per-order the game, you will not get the Zombie map. So if you want to be fighting zombies face to face in the beloved map, Nuketown, you will have to spend a bit more cash due to the fact that the Care Package is currently at the nosebleed price of 179.00$. While the price of the Harden Edition is currently at 79.00$. Will you fight to your death in the once quitequiet neighborhood? Black Ops II Pricing Credited to Amazon. ----------------------------------------------- I know I missed some things, a bit tired at the moment. If twahl reads this, he should also go through and edit things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Anonymous Bro 2 Posted September 27, 2012 Report Share Posted September 27, 2012 Thanks! all criticism is welcomed. It helps me out in the end. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Sungazer's Wife 6 Posted September 27, 2012 Report Share Posted September 27, 2012 I would like this completely edited and ready for publishing by Sunday, September 30, 2012. Preferably, earlier than Sunday, September 30, 2012, so if he runs into problems when putting it up for publishing, we can get them resolved in a timely manner. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
KSI twahl 7 2 Posted September 27, 2012 Report Share Posted September 27, 2012 I'll be editing this shortly. But I will do so compounding on Badfur's edits. I just did Lady's and I am publishing my article. If I can sneak this in real quick before class I will, otherwise it will be done so tonight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Sungazer's Wife 6 Posted October 9, 2012 Report Share Posted October 9, 2012 So... Been looking for your updated version... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
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