God 17 Posted April 7, 2013 Report Share Posted April 7, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney. Disney showed interest in continuing the sequel. At the time Square Enix was already in the development stage of Kingdom Hearts III. Tetsuya Nomaru then responded to Disney with "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that." "it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts.". Nomaru then noted that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III , Nomaru noted that he would work to realize that partners and fans were interested in the release of Kingdom Hearts III. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that realease, Nomaru then said Kingdom Hearts III would not release until after 2012. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories and Kinngdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted April 9, 2013 Report Share Posted April 9, 2013 First, please find a smaller picture (or at least resize that one). At the moment, it's a bit big, and detracts from the overall article. A picture should enhance what you write, not pull attention from it. Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in continuing the sequel.[semi-colons are used to combine two sentences. 'Disney showed interest..' is a short sentence, a semi-colon would be appropriate, given that you were just continuing the same thought as the previous sentence.] At the time, Square Enix was already in the development stage of Kingdom Hearts III. Tetsuya Nomaru then responded to Disney with "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that..." "it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts.". [so, a few things here. First, after a period, capitalise the first letter. Also, don't have two quotes from the same person back to back like you have it now. If it's the quotes are separated in what you are quoting, then '...' is appropriate to connect the two sentences. '...' signifies a gap, that you are skipping over something not important to get to the quote that matters. Also, if you have a period in a quote, and that's the end of a sentence, don't put a period after the quote. Also, no space before a comma.] Nomaru then noted that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III ,[see, you have a space there.. not needed.] Nomaru noted [You say 'noted' basically back to back, choose a different word to describe things. There are always a few different words that are appropriate to describe something. If you can't think of one, then I suggest using a thesaurus, they are quite good for just that reason.] that he would work to realize that partners and fans were interested ['work to realize' is not bad, but, 'that partners...' makes no sense. It looks like you were trying to say two different things but missed a few words, and possibly a period somewhere.] in the release of Kingdom Hearts III. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that realease,[it's 'release', please spell check your articles before submitting them. You'll catch a typo or two this way, everyone makes mistakes.] Nomaru then said [This is something else that you do. He 'then said', 'then noted', 'then asked'. Please, fix this. ] Kingdom Hearts III would not release until after 2012. [it's 2013 already, so why mention it? Do you have an updated date? As in, winter 2013, or spring 2014? Saying 'until after 2012' when it is after 2012 is useless, and doesn't tell the reader anything relevant.] Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories and connected Kinngdom [Again, spell check.] Hearts II. This article is also a bit short. Is there any more info on it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted April 9, 2013 Author Report Share Posted April 9, 2013 I'll update this after I gain some more information. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted April 13, 2013 Author Report Share Posted April 13, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in continuing the sequel. At the time, Square Enix was already in the development stage of Kingdom Hearts III. Tetsuya Nomaru then responded to Disney with "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...'..'it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts."Nomaru then said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III,t hat he would work to realize that Kingdon Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that release, the release date is to be announced. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted April 13, 2013 Report Share Posted April 13, 2013 What, no picture? Or spell check? Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer, Tetsuya Nomaru, was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in continuing the sequel. At the time, Square Enix was already in the development stage of Kingdom Hearts III. Tetsuya Nomaru then responded to Disney with "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...'..'it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts."Nomaru then said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III,t hat he [simple fix, spell check, always.] would work to realize that Kingdon [Really, spell check.] Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that release, the release date is to be announced. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected [Far too many spaces between 'Memories' and 'connected', fix it, please.] Kingdom Hearts II. Tetsuya Nomaru then responded to Disney with "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...'..'it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts."Nomaru then said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". This area gets its own section because of what is wrong with it. First, can say that...'..'it's No. Never. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru... and go from there. Remember to put a space after a period, or comma. Next, '...' connects two separate quotes by the same person. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted April 28, 2013 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest of Kingdom Hearts III. Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III, that he would work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that release, the release date is to be announced. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 2, 2013 Report Share Posted May 2, 2013 So, you changed things that didn't need to be changed, and excluded a large section from your post. You then continued talking about the point you excluded. What in my edit is so hard to understand? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 2, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 2, 2013 When you separated that section from it, WOOPS! I'll revise when I have more time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 5, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 5, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest of Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts."Nomaru then said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans then asked Nomaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III, that he would work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that release, the release date is to be announced. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 7, 2013 Report Share Posted May 7, 2013 the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest of Kingdom Hearts III It's 'Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III.' Interest of? Really? This was a mistake you already fixed, but made again when you tried to rewrite it. This is why you don't rewrite things. Kingdom Hearts."Nomaru then We talked about this already, do you just not listen? SPACE AFTER THE QUOTE. You asked me about this in skype and I told you there as well, that a space is needed at the end of the quote. Fans then asked Nomaru You use 'then x' too often. You JUST used 'Nomaru then said'. Using it again in the following sentence is too soon. Drop the 'then'. that he would work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. This makes no sense in context. What are you trying to say here? Nomaru is still working on Final Fantasy Versus III in regards to that release, the release date is to be announced. Why is this here? This is an article about Kingdom Hearts III. Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II Where's the period at the end of the sentence? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 7, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 7, 2013 I will have a revision this aftee noon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 10, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 10, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans begin to ask omaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomaru answered the question by saying he would work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 10, 2013 Report Share Posted May 10, 2013 It was pretty decent up until "Fans begin to ask omaru questions about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomaru answered the question by saying he would work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II." First.. Fans begin to ask omaru questions Who is omaru? You mean Nomaru? Nomaru answered the question by Which question did he answer? You said fans asked questions, so, is he answering one question specifically? Or, is he answering many of them? work to realize that Kingdom Hearts fans were interested in the release of the game release. This still makes no sense. What is being said here? Tell me. What, in your opinion, is being said right here? Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. What's with the extra space after memories? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 12, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 12, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans begin to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release, When asked about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomura said that fans and business partners were interested in the games release, and would work to "realize it" as soon as possible. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Sungazer's Wife 6 Posted May 13, 2013 Report Share Posted May 13, 2013 Keep up with the good work. ^.^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 13, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 13, 2013 Thanks xD, I'll try my best. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 14, 2013 Report Share Posted May 14, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans begin began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release,. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomura [Who's Nomura?] said that fans and business partners were interested in the games release, and would work to "realize it" as soon as possible.[Who or what would do work? Also, realize what?] Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 16, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans began began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release,. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomura, the producer, said that fans and business partners were interested in the games release, and that he would work to realize what the fans wanted as soon as possible. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 16, 2013 Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 Fans began began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release,. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III, Nomura, the producer, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 16, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans began began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III Nomura, the producer said that fans and business partners were interested in the games release, and that he would work to realize what the fans wanted as soon as possible. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 16, 2013 Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 You didn't change anything. Stop. Read EACH WORD out loud to yourself. Fix it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 16, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III the producer, Tetsuya Nomaru said that fans and business partners were interested in the games release, and that he would work to realize what the fans wanted as soon as possible. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Badfur 13 Posted May 16, 2013 Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 About damn time. in the games release It's game's release // The release of the game. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
God 17 Posted May 16, 2013 Author Report Share Posted May 16, 2013 Shortly after Square Enix finalized the development of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix+, the producer Tetsuya Nomaru was contacted by Disney; Disney showed interest in Kingdom Hearts III. "We have various ideas, but we're not at the point where we can say that...it's physically impossible at the present. I feel that it's not the right time to talk about the future of Kingdom Hearts." Nomaru said that Kingdom Hearts Final Mix+ was a "new series". Fans began to ask Nomaru questions about when Kingdom Hearts III would release. When asked about Kingdom Hearts III the producer, Tetsuya Nomaru said that fans and business partners were interested in the game's release, and that he would work to realize what the fans wanted as soon as possible. Kingdom Hearts 3D: Dream Drop Distance would connect Kingdom Hearts III just like Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories connected Kingdom Hearts II. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
Sungazer's Wife 6 Posted May 17, 2013 Report Share Posted May 17, 2013 Ooooooo, you made Badfur mad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Awards
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