Game review sites (can change title)

[Dynasty 4000 44]

Article is suppose to convey the use of honest reviews toward gamers to help aid in their purchases. 

 

 

New games come out nonstop during the year. Gamers have an wide variety of game choices out there from Role playing games to third person shooters.When someone is planning to do research on a game, where does he go? No one wants to buy a game without knowing what the game entails. Every gamer wants to know how good is the story mode? How does the multiplayer action work? The game case can give a very compelling review on the game; however the game company is the one SELLING THE GAME. They are going to say anything they can to make it sound appealing enough to buy. Where does a gamer go for a complete honest review of the game?

 

Gaming review sites like Game spot and IGN are fan favorites on detailed reviews on games that have just came out or even games that are from the past. Everyone knows when a big release is coming, because the announcement is well in advance. Gaming review sites know the right questions to ask developers at conventions like E3 or other gaming events. They also know how to keep the audiences' appetite wet for that upcoming game until it arrives by in depth analysis of trailers that have been release, extras coming out with the game, and more. Gaming review sites also know what the consumers want in a review after a game is released. They want to hear about how the product really is in gameplay. Gaming review sites will take you through certain aspects of the game that are the most popular for gamers. Honest ratings are giving out on more than just one aspect like performance, graphics and more. The gamer has more peace of mind knowing it was reviewed extensively, before he makes a hefty purchase toward the game.

 

In the end, all gamers want to go where they are going to get the truth about a game's features, graphics, and overall performance; from someone who is going to be honest and unbiased about the game. Someone who will take the time to research it fairly and with enough detail to settle any unwavering buyer. Someone who will know how to judge the game best - a true gamer.  Gaming review sites are a great resource used by many gamers about a plethora of products. Gamers depend on reviews on games to come that they have interest in. Gaming review sites provide these reviews faithfully for their readers to enjoy and to leave with a good idea about the game they are wanting to purchase. 

 

Edited January 11, 2013 by O_O

[Badfur 13]

So, to start, what is the point here?  What are you trying to convey?

 

Is this supposed to be an article?  If so, it is a sad excuse for one.  Ideally, an article has 3 parts.  An introduction where you introduce what you are going to be talking about.  Such as, "As games are released to the market, people can go to some websites that specialise in assessing and reviewing them..." and so on.  An intro. Then, a main body... where you put the majority of your information.  Afterwards, you finish with a closing, wrap-up type of thing..  ie: In conculsion, game review sites are an excellent place to find information.. etc.

 

So what I need you to do is identify the point you are trying to convey, and then write it in a better manner.

[Dynasty 4000 44]

That is a mock up on my iphone when i get home to my pc like i said i am going to edit myself however i wanted to post while the idea was in my head and run with it later like i said. 

[Badfur 13]

New games come out nonstop during the year. Gamers have an wide variety of game choices out there from Rrole playing games to third person shooters.When someone is planning to do research on a game, where does he go? No one wants to buy a game without knowing what the game entails. Every gamer wants to know: how good is the story mode? How does the multiplayer action work? The game case can give a very compelling review on the game; however the game company is the one SELLING THE GAME. They are going to say anything they can to make it sound appealing enough to buy. Where does a gamer go for an complete honest review of the game?

 

Gaming review sites like GameSpot and IGN are fan favorites on detailed reviews on games that have just come out or even games that are from the past. Everyone knows when a big release is coming, because the announcement it is announced well in advance. Gaming review sites know the right questions to ask developers at conventions like E3 or other gaming events. They also know how to keep the audience's appetite wet for that upcoming game until it arrives by in depth analysis of trailers that have been released, extras coming out with the game, and more. Gaming review sites also know what the consumers want in a review after a game is released. They want to hear about how the product really is in gameplay. Gaming review sites will take you through certain aspects of the game that are the most popular for gamers. Honest ratings are giving given out on more than just one aspect, like performance, graphics and more. The gamer has more peace of mind knowing it was reviewed extensively, before he makes a hefty purchase toward the game. [This last sentence doesn't sound right, given the context.  I suggest rephrasing it.]

 

In the end, all gamers want is a site to go where they are going to get the truth about a game's features, graphics, and overall performance; from someone who is going to be honest and unbiased about the game. Someone who will take the time to research it fairly and with enough detail to settle any unwavering buyer. Someone who will know how to judge the game best - a true gamer. [These are fragments, consider using ';' and making it all one, long sentence.  Alternatively, rephrase it.] Gaming review sites are a great resource used by many gamers about a plethora of products. Gamers depend on reviews on games to come that they have interest in. Gaming review sites provide these reviews faithfully for their readers to enjoy and to leave with a good idea about the game they are wanting to purchase.

 

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Ok, so, since this is the first article you have written with us, here is how I generally edit things.  I know that mostly everyone has their own writing style, and so I try to preserve that as much as possible with the edits (I keep some things in that I normally would not, because it is a style thing.)

Edits are in bold, Italics are stuff that I have issues with, Strikethrough for unnecessary fluff.

 

Fluff is bad.
 

 

[Dynasty 4000 44]

New games come out nonstop during the year. Gamers have a wide variety of game choices out there from role playing games to third person shooters.When someone is planning to do research on a game, where does he go? No one wants to buy a game without knowing what the game entails. Every gamer wants to know: how good is the story mode? How does the multiplayer action work? The game case can give a very compelling review on the game; however the game company is the one SELLING THE GAME. They are going to say anything they can to make it sound appealing enough to buy. Where does a gamer go for an honest review of the game?

 

Gaming review sites like GameSpot and IGN are fan favorites on detailed reviews on games that have just come out or even games that are from the past. Everyone knows when a big release is coming, because it is announced well in advance. Gaming review sites know the right questions to ask developers at conventions like E3. They also know how to keep the audience's appetite wet for that upcoming game until it arrives by in depth analysis of trailers that have been released, extras coming out with the game, and more. Gaming review sites also know what the consumers want in a review after a game is released. They want to hear about how the product really is in gameplay. Gaming review sites will take you through certain aspects of the game that are the most popular for gamers. Honest ratings are given out on more than just one aspect, like performance, graphics and more. After reading an honest review, a gamer can determine whether or not the game is the right fit for them. 

 

In the end, all gamers want is a site where they are going to get the truth about a game's features, graphics, and overall performance; from someone who is going to be honest and unbiased about the game; someone who will take the time to research it fairly and with enough detail to settle any unwavering buyer; someone who will know how to judge the game best - a true gamer. Gaming review sites are a great resource used by many gamers about a plethora of products. Gamers depend on reviews on games to come that they have interest in. Gaming review sites provide these reviews faithfully for their readers to enjoy and to leave with a good idea about the game they are wanting to purchase.

[Badfur 13]

Overall fairly solid.  Saying "gaming review sites" over and over is  a bit clunky though.  Have you considered using alternatives such as: These, They, etc.  Or making an abbreviation for it, like GRS.  Gaming review sites this, some GRS that... and so on.

[KSI Ace 7 97]

Or just say "sites"...the reader will know what you are talking about.

[Dynasty 4000 44]

I can go for Sites and Gr..but these and those i have always learned to try to use some but not alot due to referencing..i forget the exact reason but it stayed in my head..but i can look at replacing some of it ya.